Peer Review on Lauren Angulo

For the most part, almost all of your posts had awesome intro paragraphs where you stated the thesis clearly. They weren’t overfilled with information and clearly stated what you were going to be writing about. You also had great titles; they pulled me in and made me interested in what the post would be about. All in all you had great grammar; your posts were not filled with incorrect grammar or anything of that sort! I’d just reread some a few times and you’ll catch just the small errors. There were just a few posts where I noticed some of your thoughts were all clumped into two big paragraphs. I know they’re just blog posts, but I would keep that in mind when writing an essay for your final project!

Your post “A Thousand Thoughts a Day” on September 8 was a great post. Not only was it clearly organized, but your arguments were well backed up with facts from the reading. You did a great job keeping it simple and not overly full of unnecessary information. There weren’t any grammatical errors that I could catch as well. Awesome post!

I thought your post “Technology Within the Family” was a great post also. You had many great points as in to why technology helps gay and lesbian relationships. If you haven’t already, I think this post would be great to turn into an essay as well. You seemed to know exactly what you were talking about; you sounded very confident in your writing.

I also enjoyed your “The Chemistry of Relationships” post on October 13. You organized it well and proved your points in an easy manner. You had TONS of information and you also had enough commentary to go along with it so it wasn’t full of just straight facts. Your concluding also had a lot of insight on the topic, so if you do end up writing about this I’d break up some of your concluding throughout your paper because the commentary you had was great.

I also thought your “A Mallcondo Culture” post on November 3 was another great short essay. I definitely think you could evolve it into something bigger for our final project. Again, like your other posts, it was well put together and organized with facts and commentary.

You are a very good writer and I hope these critiques helped! Good job and good luck on your final project!